Issa smiled happily when she got it right. When she was done eating, she didn’t know what to do. All the things that were in the castle got boring to play with, especially if you are only playing by yourself. But all of a sudden she saw a small box, it was like a jewelry box, but it was brown. She took it into her hands and stared at the front of the box for a moment. It was an unfamiliar box with weird writing on it. When she opened the box, there was a bright glow, but after a second, it seemed to darken. There was a piece of paper in the box, she took it out and read it. This time, Issa tried to solve with a number line.
After, solving the question in the box, she got really bored, so Issa went to the small window of the castle and just stared outside of the castle, at all the beautiful things, hoping that one day she could get out and have fun outside. She was so lonely she would play with anybody, even an animal perhaps. All of a sudden, she heard someone walking nearby the castle. When she looked down she saw a handsome young prince about her age just wondering around. She yelled hello and asked him why he was here. He replied “I’m coming to save you miss.” When he looks at the castle, he saw that it was really big and it had two doors to get in. He randomly picked one of them and opened it. It was locked, but on the door there was a question you had to answer. Joe decided to use money to solve this problem.
When he answered the question, the door magically opened and said “Correct!” Once the door was open, he took a step inside and looked all around, it led to nothing. He was so confused, there was nothing there, only a dark space. He went out and stared at the door again in confusion. “Um, try the other door, I think it might work. By the way, what is your name?” said Issa from high up in the tower. “Why, my name is Joe, what is yours?” Joe replied, trying to sound manly. “My name is Issa.” Issa said. So, Joe went and pulled the other door open. This door also had a question you had to answer. Joe thought that it would be easier this time if he just used ordinary standard math.
Then the door opened and when he stepped inside there were 2 different staircases to choose. Joe felt so confused, why were there so much different ways to go? First, he stood there deciding which way to go, he was too lazy to walk all those stairs. So, Joe decided to pick the stairway that was the shortest. Joe walked all the way up until there was a door in front of him. It was a gray big door with a big blue knob. The door creaked open when he opened it and all of a sudden, out popped an integer question.
Then, the door said “Correct!” and so went into the room. When he went in, he smelled something really good, and it made him hungry. The smell led him to a room full of wonderful food. “Excuse me? Where am I?” he asked anyone who was there. The wall answered “Your in the kitchen.” “Oh, Where is Princess Issa’s room? Asked Joe politely. “Her room, is in the other door, you went to the wrong door” said the wall. Joe said thank you and hurriedly went out of the room and ran down the stairs. He went to the other flight of stairs and it took him a while to get to the door. This door was bright purple and had a pink doorknob. He opened the door and there popped another integer question.
He opened up the door and there staring out the window hopelessly was Princess Issa. "Princess Issa, I'm here to free you out of this lonely place" says Joe. "Oh, thank you Prince Joe, I am so glad you saved me." Together, they left the beautiful castle and went to live where Prince Joe lived.
Hey, great story! Can't wait until it's finished. Good Job!
October 28, 2008 at 12:15 AM
The things I changed about my story was, I read it over and changed the spelling mistakes that I had, and I made my sentences more understanding. I made some of the sentences that were too short, i made them long and the sentences that were long i made them short.
November 2, 2008 at 6:55 PM